https://wiki.horizonsend.net/index.php?action=history&feed=atom&title=Talk%3ATutorial Talk:Tutorial - Revision history 2026-11-07T20:25:44Z Revision history for this page on the wiki MediaWiki 1.43.11 https://wiki.horizonsend.net/index.php?title=Talk:Tutorial&diff=15069&oldid=prev Bronze: so much yap (too lazy to actually revise this page. Am backseat wiki editing.) 2026-11-04T20:08:06Z <p>so much yap (too lazy to actually revise this page. Am backseat wiki editing.)</p> <p><b>New page</b></p><div>&lt;span style=&quot;color:#aa00aa;&quot;&gt;&#039;&#039;&#039;||&#039;&#039;&#039;&lt;/span&gt; Please revise this page. <br /> <br /> &lt;span style=&quot;color:#aa00aa;&quot;&gt;&#039;&#039;&#039;||&#039;&#039;&#039;&lt;/span&gt; The only section jumps between 2nd and 3rd person, and contains insufficient explanation. Keep text neutral, in 3rd person, and consistent.<br /> <br /> &lt;span style=&quot;color:#aa00aa;&quot;&gt;&#039;&#039;&#039;||&#039;&#039;&#039;&lt;/span&gt; If J.A.N.E. is named J.A.N.E., then don&#039;t refer to them as Jane. <br /> <br /> &lt;span style=&quot;color:#aa00aa;&quot;&gt;&#039;&#039;&#039;||&#039;&#039;&#039;&lt;/span&gt; Link the [[Horizon Transit Hub]] at the first mention of a transithub, fix the section header (again, objective speech; try something like Sequence? (what it&#039;s called internally iirc) idk, just not &quot;What happens in the tutorial&quot;). Time also jumps from present to past tense in your text too often.<br /> <br /> &lt;span style=&quot;color:#aa00aa;&quot;&gt;&#039;&#039;&#039;||&#039;&#039;&#039;&lt;/span&gt; [[Pirate]]s, [[Core System]]s, [[Horizon&#039;s End]], and [[Starship|Ships]] should be linked (large ship-like structure can be swapped for large [[Starship]]), and the [[Tutorial]] really isn&#039;t a special place. At first mention of a page&#039;s title (Ex. &#039;&#039;&#039;Shuttle&#039;&#039;&#039;, it should be bolded.) &lt;span style=&quot;color:#aa00aa;&quot;&gt;&#039;&#039;&#039;||&#039;&#039;&#039;&lt;/span&gt; &lt;span style=&quot;color:#7ec3de;&quot;&gt;&#039;&#039;&#039;4/11/26&#039;&#039;&#039;&lt;/span&gt; [[User:Bronze|Bronze]] ([[User_talk:Bronze|Talk]] | [[Special:Contributions/Bronze|Contribs]])</div> Bronze